MAC WeeK 2 - Roberto Rivera Response

"I was looking at all the discussion regarding abstracts and I had a complicated time reducing mine from 157 or so words to the required 120 without leaving out any information and this is what it came out.


In the United States, the number of immigrants increases continuously and with them, the number of their descendants. These individuals need an education addressing 21st century skills to become a competitive asset to the work force and the country. A difference could be made in their education providing an education with some technology-based tools, which in turn help young students to enhance English language learning. To help this part of the population to become citizens that actively participate in the growth of the nation and their own family, Web 2.0 tools like Zoho may enhance their education. Community involvement in and out school will play an important role in the use of technology to learn English as a second language."

Please, comment to get a chance to change before March 21st
Posted by DuetimesR at 1:20 PM
Labels: 120 Words, abstract
1 comments:

rebbiej said...

Roberto,

An excellent job on reducing the number of words on your abstract. There are just a couple of changes I would make. It is easier for me to retype your abstract than explain the suggestions. Remember, these are just ideas, nothing more than that on my end :)

In the United States, the number of immigrants increases daily, thus increasing descendants. To become productive members of society, educational opportunities addressing 21st century skills must be available. Providing technology-based tools, which in turn help young students enhance both language and technology skills. To help these newcomers become citizens and actively participate in the growth of not only the nation, but the foundation of the family unit. Web 2.0 and Zoho are examples of these tools. Community involvement in and out of school continues to play an important role in the use of technology while learning English as a second language.
March 13, 2010 7:41 PM